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Commentary For my first piece of original writing I intend to create a piece primarily written for entertainment however, I also want to portray an interest into historical and political persuasions. I aim to write this piece for an audience of teenagers to young adult who are aged from around fifteen to twenty-five and are male, I also wish to identify with those interested in political thrillers within this age range. The genre of which shall be a short fiction story consisting chiefly of narrative and written in the third person. I picture this piece as being one of a collection of short stories concerned with the political-thriller fiction sub-genre. Despite being a fiction text I aim to tie in real world non-fiction. I was inspired to write a story of this nature after watching Luc Besson's 'The Professional', alongside reading material from Robert Harris, such as 'Archangel', 'Fatherland' and 'Enigma'. ...read more.


I consider the changes I have made prior to completion have certainly improved the final draft of this piece; however, if I were to revise it once again I could continue to make improvements. This piece has been constructed to exploit the expectations of the reader by diverging from the conventions of traditional story telling; beginning, middle and end, respectively. By challenging this system I hope I have created an original piece that intrigues the reader. throughout the piece I have tried to maintain an atmosphere of consternation and to do so I have used many different grammatical and lexical techniques, for instance the use of certain semantic fields that are common with post cold war Russia such as 'KGB', 'Prospekts' and 'Klashnikov AK-47'. I have also written using the semantic field of dirt and creating a feeling for the attitudes of the time. Again it can be shown here by 'smog', 'sodden' and 'orifice'. ...read more.


what I have tried to imply is the possibility of Vladimir being homosexual, which Nikolai picks up on and questions in the conversation. At the end of the piece I switch writing from third person into first person; "I can hear," and "their souls", this is so I can comment objectively on the events that had revealed themselves and stimulate the reader to resolve the story according to their own reading of it. The story is presented through narrative prose, using paragraphs to separate the text into more meaningful and accessible sections. Adjacency pairs determine the order of dialogue to replicate that of spoken text. Upon commencing this piece of writing it was my ambition to amuse and beguile an audience of comparable cultural elation to myself. The desire to write such a piece fired me with zeal and left my feeling rather ebullient. I feel I have successfully completed what I set out to do and by recording the response of my target audience to my final piece the consensus was that this was true. ...read more.

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