• Join over 1.2 million students every month
  • Accelerate your learning by 29%
  • Unlimited access from just £6.99 per month

Narrative essay 1

Extracts from this document...


Tanvi Dattani 10C Narrative Essay - Life changing fire The well sparkled in the moonlight. The bucket was heavy, but that compensated for the hard and tiring work I had done in the factory. The water was cool on my lips which was contradicted the heat in the shack. I closed my eyes, and heaved a sigh. Sheila once told me how she dreamed of one day going to Mumbai to go to study and making her parents proud. She always wondered if her parents were alive, they would be proud of her or not. This thought never left my mind. At the end of the bucket, the magical moment of freedom will be lost and back in the shack again. ...read more.


I couldn't do anything. All I could hear were screams and shrieks. I knew I had to save Sheila but wondered how to. This fiend was smoldering away my only support. "Sheila Sheila, I'm coming for you, hold on." I took a deep breath and prepared myself to enter the vicious inferno that might even absorb me in the bargain, but nothing could stop me from saving Sheila. I could feel my heart beating in my mouth as I prepared to go in. My life flashed before my eyes but my fear just disappeared when I heard a cry. "Save me someone please!" I knew that was Sheila and thought no more about myself but only about Sheila. ...read more.


Sheila was now merely a victim of this incident. I collapsed, feeling feeble and desolated; like I was the reason Sheila was dead. The villagers went on pouring more and more water but it was no use. I stood near the fire that whole night, remembering all the times Sheila and I had spent together. All her dreams, her hopes and her deepest desires came crawling back into my mind. The times we had laughed and the times we had cried. As the fire was slowly fading, my memories faded along with it. The next morning, the monster finally gave in. After a long search through stones and ruins of others, they finally found her- but without her voice, her smile, her hair. Her beautiful pale face was charred black. Her slender legs were bone. The hell of my six months had finally perished consuming my only friend, and left her remains. Word count: 723 ...read more.

The above preview is unformatted text

This student written piece of work is one of many that can be found in our GCSE Writing to Inform, Explain and Describe section.

Found what you're looking for?

  • Start learning 29% faster today
  • 150,000+ documents available
  • Just £6.99 a month

Here's what a teacher thought of this essay

5 star(s)

A highly effective and descriptive essay, demonstrating skillful use of language to convey emotion. The horror and despair are cleverly conveyed and the depiction of the fire as a "beast" or "fiend" is very apt. Synonyms for the fire are used confidently too, such as "inferno" and "conflagration".

A few slips in grammar and punctuation slightly mar an otherwise excellent essay.

5 stars

Marked by teacher Jeff Taylor 26/04/2013

Not the one? Search for your essay title...
  • Join over 1.2 million students every month
  • Accelerate your learning by 29%
  • Unlimited access from just £6.99 per month

See related essaysSee related essays

Related GCSE Writing to Inform, Explain and Describe essays

  1. Marked by a teacher

    Creative Writing - Gothic Horror

    3 star(s)

    Suddenly, I woke sweating and crying, so loud that my grandfather came in and told me to go back to calm down and go back to sleep, so I did as I was told and calmed down and then went back to sleep.

  2. Haunted house narrative writing. The house stood on the top of lonely hill. ...

    I needed fresh air. Outside the windows I could see the whole city as dead as doornail. There was no trace of any sound, not even a single muttering or laugh. I again turned towards the corridors. I only had two more rooms to check.

  1. Creative Writing- The Tsunami

    They were recruiting young orphans and those who have nothing to lose to fight for them. The guard that raped Bhavan and I was General Gander, he ran this place. He was behind so many attacks on civilians in Sri Lanka.

  2. Descriptive Writing: A beautiful landscape or natural scene which has stuck in your memory. ...

    It seemed like an endless sky, packed with cumulus clouds, all erect, side by side with tanned arms and legs sticking out of them. It was at this point that I had clapped my eyes on a crying child. He must have been at the tender age of maybe three or four.

  1. A Friend in need is a Friend Indeed

    " What happened?" asked Mrs Field. " I hope Jacob was telling the truth about your situation, did you really slip or were the boys involved?" " It was an accident, I wasn't looking where I was going and suddenly I tripped," " What about your arm it's bruised up

  2. english descriptive essay- The Match

    It was against the ruthless BahamaBoyz. This club had earned the reputation of tearing their opponents' limbs and emerging victorious using notorious means. It was a blood-bath if anyone tried to argue and we having all average built, 5 feet 4 inch players did not have the guts to do it.

  1. Bonfire night.

    looked up in the sky it is beautiful it looks like a giant peacock was floating in the dark sky. The sky lit up with the fireworks it looked like lightning had been struck, you could smell the fireworks they smelt of gunpowder burning.

  2. Descriptive essay: The Library

    She is wearing a short black dress, black leggings, a red sweater and black boots. She has a nervous anxious attitude that is reflected in the sound that she makes when she taps her fingers on the receptionist?s table.

  • Over 160,000 pieces
    of student written work
  • Annotated by
    experienced teachers
  • Ideas and feedback to
    improve your own work