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                                    By Hannah Hurley

A gale chilled the bones of an intrepid Miss Rose Taylor as she wrapped her thin ragged shawl ever more tightly round her shoulders. Rain had battered the city, leaving the cloyingly sweet scent of freshly soaked pavements and dilapidated buildings. Still the weather suited Rose perfectly; she had no patience for sunlight, why should the weather be so content when she was not? The grey dimness hid the worst of the dirt and the grime along the streets of Whitechapel as well as her tear-stained cheeks. Whispering a silent prayer, she sullenly slipped through a rickety gate into a darkened alley.

Mud and crumbled leaves caught at Roses skirt soaking the black wool and making it drag through the slush unbearably. A mother drunk on gin, lolled against the crumbling wall of a ramshackle house- derelict and haggard with wear. The whole street spoke of neglect and Rose listened. She heard the ghost of every abandoned baby, left outside in the bitter air to die; the echo of the forlorn traveller, stolen from their native soil and stripped of everyone they ever loved. Though, poor as Rose was, it was unthinkable that she should ever be taken from her familiar (if harsh) life.  So as she slunk into her flee-ridden room- no-one- not even Rose herself- could have predicted the screams that awaited her on the other-side of the decayed, worm-eaten door.

In a vast, gothic room on the third-floor of a blustery, old mansion Rose awoke with a start.

Dazed and confused at waking up in the tapestry-lined room in more opulence than she had ever imagined she would experience she stepped, trembling onto a plush Persian rug, painstakingly avoiding the splintering floorboards. Three days, Rose had been trapped; suffocating in the prison of her dreams. She longed for the squalid slums of London, her masked oppressors had not been unkind, and more luxury had been pressed upon her than she wanted. The signs of her poverty were erased; the ragged shawl and tattered dress had been replaced with lavish silk gowns and satin shoes.  A maid, her maid, brought decadent food yet, the ancient mansion made her lethargic. The whole house was pompous midnight velvet, faded slightly from age. Rose wished for a Prince Charming to risk the hazardous tides of the foaming sea, scale the perilous gate to whish her away from her forbidding prison. Of course, as she retreated into her own private world, reality crept up on her: a silent killer, smothering her with the soft down pillow from her four poster bed...

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As the weeks went by Rose grew tiresome, pacing the creaking oak floorboards she had formerly tried so hard to evade.  The clothes and shoes she had previously admired she knew to be shallow, a petty bribe to make her attentive to their views. Through constant scolding, Rose begrudgingly reformed her cockney accent to a more refined upper-class drawl. She recognised nothing of herself and while her captors were ecstatic with their accomplishments, Rose privately mourned for her former self, the Rose Taylor who struggled through life, selling flowers for food, the Rose Taylor who would have hated this spoilt, ...

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