Don’t Get Me Started On Smoking!
It’s one of those depressing Mondays when you’re feeling so reluctant to go to school. Don’t forget, it’s seven in the morning and all you want to do is stay at home in your warm cosy inviting bed to sleep, you wish! No, this is reality were talking about. Not anything can be superior as that. This is how it really works; you’re walking to school in the grey gloomy morning having to put up with the horrific acrid smell which burns the back of your throat because self-centred people these days can’t consider the cluster of kids who have to walk past their shop every day. I do not care if it is free, but I do not want your second hand smoke!
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The "stop smoking" message is strongly put across here, with appropriate language and emotive images. Good arguments are made for stopping, including pulling at the strings of the guilt arising from making others suffer. Rhetorical questions are used to great effect. Paragraph construction is well-controlled and so is sentence construction to an extent. There are some poorly-constructed forms; these are mostly the kind of informal structures we may use in conversation: "To look into their eyes sunk into their head." but which are not appropriate in a discursive essay. 3 stars