Lord of the Flies - Letter from Ralph

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Lord of the Flies Letter to Ralph parents Dear Mom and Dad,     I am writing you to inform you that I am very well, I hope you are fine too. I have spent the last few days on a deserted tropical island where our plane was evacuate and shot down. I am now being rescued by a navy officer. I just wanted to let you know about my experiences that I had on the island. Well when I first reached the island I found it really surreal and beautiful. The atmosphere was so calm, quiet and peaceful. Then I met a boy called Piggy. He was very fat, he had very thick spectacles. He also told me that he had asthma. He always used to say my aunty told me not to do this/that.  After a few minutes Piggy found a conch shell and showed me how to make a noise with it. I used the conch to call the other boys from across the island then suddenly a party of choirboys came. Jack was the leader of choir; he was an arrogant and unpleasant fellow. Then we had a meeting and I was declared as the ruler and Jack and the other choir boys went hunting for something to eat. While the other boys were hunting I was trying to maintain some remnants of civilization.    
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Later on some of the younger boys believed that they saw a "beastie" on the island. This beast scared all of us. We had many fears on that island, but needed to remember that they could not let us get in the way of what was important to us. We all decided that we needed a fire to survive on the island and came to the conclusion to use Piggy's glasses as a means of starting it. We get the fire going, but jack carelessness in containing that fire burnt half of the island.  Jack had focused on the hunting ...

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This letter shows a very good knowledge of the plot of the novel. There are some lapses in expression and some inconsistent use of tenses throughout the letter. However the writer shows an in depth knowledge of narrative developments in the novel and gives insight into the character of Ralph. More paragraphs are needed to make the letter easier to read. Some direct speech is used which gives greater authenticity. ** 2 stars.