Most unlikley hero essay

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| Jessica Tilbrook |

Most unlikely hero

Back from the best holidays ever, now school. Great! Everybody was leaping off the buses as they entered the bus park, keen to see friends they haven’t seen in ages, others dozing off on the bus as they haven’t been awake so early in weeks. The playground was the meeting point; it was like a heaven full of gossip. Everyone was sharing what they did over the holidays and spreading secrets or rumours that weren’t suppose to be told. In the corner by the sports hall was Kylie, the bags under her eyes made it look like she hadn’t slept in years, her eyes half closed as she lent against the wall.  As the bell rang, the shock on everyone’s faces changed from a chirpy one to a miserable one. They had just come to terms with they actually had to start working again.

First lesson. English. Everyone slowly plodding to their seats as Mr Brown opened the door and announced “Lets start of with a test.” What a way to start the year.  I looked up to check the time thinking it was nearly the end of the lesson, but it had only been 20 minutes in. No one could really be bothered with the test; I could hear my brain cells knocking together as if they were nothing in my skull.  I had forgotten all my knowledge over the holidays

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Everyone was bored, “Please can I go to the toilet sir?” Mandy asked politely, “Okay but be quick.” replied Mr Brown. Mandy stepped out of the room, and took a big sigh of relief. Wondering down the corridor there was a light white mist floating along the floor like it was dry ice. She just carried on slowly plodding to the toilet to take as long as possible, so she didn’t have to go back to class.

As she entered the girl’s toilets the door slammed behind. She stood in front of the mirror checking her hair and make ...

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At times there are some good examples of how language devices can be used to create certain effects; however this isn't sustained throughout, meaning the work becomes a bit dull at points and the characters are never fully developed into 3D characters. 3 Stars