Personal and Imaginative Coursework Unit
My name, Aarit, means ‘one who seeks the right direction.’ But my choices do not seem to be the right paths.
I am very uncertain especially on life. Is it worth living or not? Too many bad things happen in this world. Hunger and famine taunts the people whist death and terrorism torments the world. War destroys communities and homes as disease plagues mankind with evil and suffering. Are the killers just bad people killing the innocent or people sent by God to restore peace and rid the world of darkness? There are too many questions and nothing to answer them with. Is God punishing the bad in an attempt to restore the good? If so, then why am I being punished? What have I done?
My name is Aarit Patel and I see no meaning in life. The Poona rice farm have been in my family for generations and, up until four years ago, was the most successful rice farm in all of India. Now they make not even enough to feed my wife and our child. This is through no fault of our own. Drugs were found growing in farms all around this area but none in mine. Neighbouring rice farms have been shut down and the drug flow in Poona has stopped. There are no longer any drugs but the damage has been done. The reputation of the area has been destroyed and people refuse to buy my rice. The people of India are greatly against drugs; they feel that they are against God. Countless time, my fields have been torched by demonstrators, thinking that I was responsible for the drug influx that hit the community. One of my workers was beaten for being my associate. Now, men fear to work for me, turning Poona rice farm from one of the most successful rice farms in all India to a tiny, profitless facility. My workforce had been reduced to nothing more than my wife and myself, falling from about thirty men due to the fear to work for me. Mothers quickly hassle their children into the nearest shop or doorway when they see me walking down the road. Men fear my presence.
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There is some good description in here but as a whole piece it is not that cohesive and the structure needs to be developed so that the events all hang together a bit more successfully. 4 Stars