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Quality of writing
The quality of Written Communication is good. There is no cause for concerns from an English perspective as the use of spelling, punctuation and grammar are all accurate. From a Psychology perspective, as well, the candidate succeeds here, as important key words and terminology is applied appropriately with confidence and ease.
Level of analysis
The Level of Analysis (AO2; critical evaluation) is not marked here, but Level of Description is (AO1; knowledge and understanding) is, so this shall be marked here. The candidate demonstrates a very good knowledge of Freud's theory by discussing many ideas about the development of the adult psyche, which parts of our minds are developed at which ages, and the psychosexual stages we all go through, as well as both the Oedipus and Elektra complex. All this would've been plenty and surplus to the required building blocks for the continuation of the essay into an explanation of the perspective's beliefs about psychopathology, but as there is no explanation about what the question explicitly asks the candidates to focus on, they cannot score more than half marks.
Response to question
This is a sound essay comprising of two paragraphs, though I would argue that perhaps the second paragraph suits itself to the requirements of an essay introduction better than the first paragraph (that said, there is no clear introduction or conclusion here, so the candidate cannot expect to achieve top marks regardless of the depth of their answer due to not showing an ability to coherently structure an effective essay). As for the detail, there is a good level of it, though very little effort is made to directly answer the question. The question focuses no how the psychodynamic approach explains psychopathology, but the candidate does very little to explicitly focus on psychopathology and instead talks at length about the beliefs and the assumptions of the perspective, so they are not really answering the question. As a result, the candidate cannot really achieve a very high grade for A Level - figure around a E/D grade, as some of the information presented here does cross-over to what one would expect to find in an essay more suited to psychopathology. Candidates are again reminded or the huge importance to read the question and make sure they are consistently referring to what it asks.