Conflict - personal short story

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                                        Conflict

Wednesday started off as any other average day, a little hotter and more humid than usual but that was all. One could tell there was a storm brewing but not in the way I could begin to imagine.

I walked downstairs just as my father was leaving and said a quick goodbye, giving him a kiss on his clean- shaven cheek as he rushed off to his stuffy prison of an office. My mother had breakfast ready in the kitchen, and I smiled as I was greeted with the smells of cooked breakfast and freshly brewed coffee.

“Good morning Abi,” mum greeted me in a chirpy voice, “Did you sleep ok?”

 “Yes thank you Mum,” I replied.

        That morning continued with the normal routine of washing, getting dressed and getting ready for school. At eight o’clock mum bustled me into the car and we left for school. We drove down the same road as always with the same bumps down Town Green Road, and as we turned the corner passing number 62 we could hear Mrs. Hensons dog barking madly, as usual. I became bored with looking outside so I began to study my mother. As she concentrated on the road with her crystal blue eyes, a strand of her blonde hair fell from behind her ear. I’d often been told how attractive my mum was, and how lucky I was to be so stunning with a combination of my father and her. I had been gifted in having the best of my mother and father. My mother’s bright blue eyes and my father’s jet black hair. My mother’s petite features and rosebud lips along with my father’s intelligence and sporting abilities. Some times people in the street would just stare at me, and complete strangers would tell me how outstanding I looked. I hate the way I look, I just wish I could be plain and normal with brown hair and green eyes, and feel like I fit in- not be different.

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        “Here, we are,” Mum said, snapping me out of my trance.

We pulled up to the familiar entrance of my school with its big, black, iron gates gaping open creepily. “ Bye mum,” I said as I hoped out of our big blue Cherokee jeep.

“Bye,” mum replied, “ I’ll pick you up at five after your tennis lesson, ”she called as she began to slowly drive away just allowing me to slam the car door shut.

        I reached my classroom just in time for registration and sat down next to my best friend Chloe. “ Abigail Burton?” Mrs. ...

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There is some effective description and imagery created in this piece. What needs to be worked on is the structure. Ensure a link to the title throughout the writing and some form of link between the beginning and ending of the story. 4 Stars