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Quality of writing
The Quality of Written Communication (QWC) is fair, though a misuse of grammar drastically reduces the QWC mark when the candidate discusses the Ego's defence mechanisms. Though an extremely well-informed description, there is a disregard for the standards of grammar in that list items are separated by full stops instead of commas or, in this case, what should be semi-colons as the list items contain many words each. An attention to this detail is required for a high QWC, and QWC is just as important as the analysis because if the clarity of your written expression is at a point where the examiner cannot read your answer fluidly, then you will lose marks for not being able to express yourself using the appropriate and correct English.
Level of analysis
The Level of Analysis shown he is very good, and each and every evaluation point is nicely backed up with psychological evidence from Freud's case studies (e.g. - Little Hans and the Oedipus Complex) or other, extended works on Freud's theories. The candidate very systematically - and therefore very clearly - elaborates on the contribution of the Id, the Ego and the Superego in determining our thoughts and desires, though it may have been a good idea to comment further on when these constituent parts of the psyche develop and present themselves with age, as this directly ties in with the candidate's next point about the Psychosexual Stages of Development, as determined by the case study of Little Hans. Tying the answer over itself to create a more cohesive answer is a good way of showing the examiner the knowledge you have of the subject you are studying is proficient and you have confidence in expressing said knowledge of it.
Response to question
This is a piece of coursework based on explaining the highly complex Psychodynamic Perspective of Psychology. The answer is incredibly well-focused and addresses all the necessary factors that contribute to the perspective. The candidate shows a very well-developed, profound knowledge of the perspective and retains a consistent focus on the three main theories that make up Freudian psychoanalysis: The Stages of Psychosexual Development, The Three Constituents of the Psyche and Retrospection. The candidate also provides a very well-structured and well-informed analysis, commenting on how the big debates of psychology such as Free Will vs. Determinism play parts in Freud's theories.